max314
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Joined: 30/9/2005
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Pretty much.
But, in the eventuality that you're still checking in from time to time, I'll offer you a quick critique.
I won't comment on the acting since neither you nor your co-star are trained actors.
With regards to script, I have to say that I clocked your ending from the opening scene. Nevertheless, it's still a smartly written script, even if it is overly conceptual and expositional and lacking in terms of character development. Also, your story structure is somewhat lopsided – your first and last acts are the only places where a discernible narrative exhibits itself, whereas the rest is a montage in which your audience struggles to invest since we don't really care about the characters being "montaged".
Aesthetically, the film is a bit overly processed with the whole faux bleach bypass thing and the slow motion. I know the look you were going for, but perhaps you were trying a bit too hard to be "stylish" to the point that you kept the audience at too much of a distance from what was going on. So a more naturalistic approach may have suited the film better.
In conclusion, let me say well done, good effort, and I hope you keep making films, keep learning, and one day I'd like to see an even better product. If nothing else, you kept me watching till the very end and that's the baseline from which you have to start. So thumbs up from me.
Congratulations and good luck.
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