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Writer looking for some feedback - 16/5/2007 11:45:34 PM   
MagicMan

 

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Hi everyone,
 
I'm very happy to say that I've just had my debut novel published and would love to swap thoughts and opinions on what makes a compelling read.  For openers, what do you think attracts a potential reader?  Would it be the front cover like mine below or is it more likely to be on the strength of the synopsis? What draws us to decide to invest the time to actually sit down and read a book?
 



Edit - I've changed the code so the pic is visible

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RE: Book covers - 17/5/2007 10:03:09 AM   
jonson


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Congratulations, can't see anything though.
I normally go on recommendations, the fact I may have read 1 or more of the authors books beforehand, but ultimately, as a blind buy, I go firstly on the title and cover, then I read the synopsis on the back.
All the rest of my book buying just normally pops in my head, for instance having a conversation with friends on a certian subject and realising you know jack-shit about it. I'll hunt down a book or books (normally a Google search) and chose whichever one I find the most suitable.
Then  I'll resume said discussion with friends about a month later, trying to be a smart-arse but they'll change the subject to something else and I'll be back to square one.
Give us a link to your book and we might check it out unless you're just popping into lots of forums trying to promote youself which seems the case.


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RE: Book covers - 17/5/2007 10:57:19 AM   
MagicMan

 

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Hi,

Thanks for your reply. Actually the reason I didn't give a link to my book in the first place or mention its title was because I didn't want to give the impression I was just trying to promote it! :)

But do please feel free to do a search for my book if you are interested. It's called The Magic Lands.

Thanks for taking an interest though.

All the best.

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RE: Book covers - 17/5/2007 11:13:14 AM   
Evessa


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Hi just looked at your book and it looks like a good read, might check it out sometime.
In answer to your question on 'what makes a compelling read?' I have to say that I usually go either on past author or recommendation from friends/family. Sometimes though if I am stuck for a book I will tend to read the synopsis on the back to catch my eye. Although a good title and cover can sometimes catch my eye.
Good luck with the book sales

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RE: Book covers - 17/5/2007 12:25:31 PM   
MagicMan

 

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Thanks for your kind words. That would be great if you do get a chance to read my work and I would be really happy (unless you hate it of course:) ) to hear your views on it. If you don't decide to buy it, you could always ask your library to get it in. Anyway, thanks a lot for checking it out.

I agree with you about an eye-catching cover, but really in the end for me it's the synopsis that decides whether I will actually go ahead and read it.

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RE: Book covers - 30/5/2007 1:47:23 AM   
Jaina Skywalker Solo


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quote:



I agree with you about an eye-catching cover, but really in the end for me it's the synopsis that decides whether I will actually go ahead and read it.


I agree.

I think the main job of the cover is to catch the eye and provoke interest; much like the title (although the greatest book titles are those which are explanatory yet thought-provoking, lyrical and rich in meaning and - imho - ambiguous.  No mean feat to accomplish!)

The synopsis/blurb is the daddy though; excluding recommendations, that is always what makes me decide whether I'll give a virgin author a shot or not.  I'll often open a random page and see whether I like the prose (I'm very keen on language), but if I find the synopsis intriguing then that book is as good as sold.

All in all, then, the cover is very important as, coupled with the title, it is the first step in garnering interest.  It is certainly not the be-all-and-end-all though.

Congratulations, btw; I'm quite green with envy.  All the best.


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RE: Book covers - 30/5/2007 8:59:38 AM   
MagicMan

 

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Hi Jaina,

Thanks for your reply. I definitely agree with you and I think the synopsis is key. Don't know if you've had a chance to check mine out (you can find it on Amazon), but I'd appreciate some feedback.

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RE: Book covers - 13/6/2007 8:38:37 AM   
MagicMan

 

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Hi,

Just to let everyone know that I've posted an extract from my book at this link: http://hometown.aol.co.uk/markjohnhockley/myhomepage/mywork.html

If anyone gets time to look at it I would be very interested in hearing your opinion.

Thanks :)

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RE: Book covers - 18/6/2007 4:40:22 PM   
Evessa


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Hi Magicman
Sorry for the delay but I've only just realised that I had some mail in my inbox ( I'm Billy-no-mates!) Just read your extract and must say it sounds like a great read, deffinately had me gripped and wanting to read what happened next! When is your book released or is it already out?

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RE: Book covers - 19/6/2007 10:10:14 AM   
MagicMan

 

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Hi,

Thanks for the kind words. Yes it's been out about a month. You can find it on Amazon and lots of other on-line stores. It would be great if you read the whole thing. I'm desperate for some feedback! :)

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RE: Book covers - 19/6/2007 12:15:36 PM   
Evessa


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Will deffinately look into it, so have the critics been kind? What have they said about your book?
How long did it take you to write? and to get published?
Sorry for all the questions I've been thinking of writing my own novel as I have a few ideas

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RE: Book covers - 19/6/2007 12:52:32 PM   
MagicMan

 

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I've had some reviews posted on Amazon which are pretty good. But it's still early days I guess. You wouldn't believe how long it too from the time I started on that book till it was published (I wasn't writing the whole time of course!!).

I appreciate you taking an interest in my work and if you get it be sure to let me know :)

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RE: Book covers - 1/7/2007 11:59:54 AM   
Newander


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Well done firstly.

Your book does look interesting.

Have PM'd you.

Back onto subject, a good cover is important, but the synopsis is key for me, when choosing a book.

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RE: Book covers - 1/7/2007 1:29:40 PM   
MagicMan

 

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quote:

ORIGINAL: Newander

Well done firstly.

Your book does look interesting.

Have PM'd you.

Back onto subject, a good cover is important, but the synopsis is key for me, when choosing a book.


Thank you for your encouraging words. Definitely agree about the synopsis!

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RE: Book covers - 16/7/2007 7:38:25 PM   
MagicMan

 

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Hi everyone,
Just wanted to let you know that I've posted another excerpt from my book at this link: http://hometown.aol.co.uk/markjohnhockley/myhomepage/mywork.html
If anyone gets a chance to take a look at it I would appreciate hearing your opinion.

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RE: Book covers - 29/7/2007 7:35:03 AM   
MagicMan

 

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Just a quick update on my book for those whom have shown an interest. I've pasted in a review from Amazon US that I think gives a gives a good impression of what the book is really like.

'One might look at The Magic Lands and find the title a little generic, and the summary may be a little cliche, but if you were to pick it up you'll see that it is full of suprises. The story is quite a roller coaster and the plot can become utterly unpredictable. I should also mention, that this isn't little red riding hood. The story is dark, bringing up memories of another dark fantasy, Pan's Labrynth. Like Pan's Labrynth,and any good fable, there is an underlying message behind it all and it is a message definitely worth hearing'.

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RE: Book covers - 15/8/2007 11:10:01 AM   
Achtung Englander


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I am with Jaina Skywalker Solo - the cover and the title are obviously the first thing that you judge a book by (like judging a person by their appearance when you meet someone for the first time). The book cover usually but not always will deternine the genre of the book and that is also very important - for example when browsing for a historical fiction book you will skip romance and science fiction

After cover and title comes the synopsis - is it interesting ?. That is followed by reading one or two pages to gage the writing style of the author

Recommendations and book reviews (like newspapers) also a great help.

Actually apart from Amazon can anyone recommend a good book review site ?

As for judging a book by its cover - that is probably debatable on the cover but on in all I would say that book covers DO sell books

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RE: Book covers - 15/8/2007 11:23:03 PM   
mafyou


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I think anybody who goes into a bookshop without knowing what they want will first look at the title, then cover, then synopsis. That's just how it works subconciously. If the book meets your requirements for these then you go for it. That's normally my thinking. The synopsis is the real decider though, as everyone has already said.

That book my Magicman looks interesting. I might have a look if i get time.


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RE: Book covers - 21/8/2007 11:21:11 AM   
homersimpson_esq


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Congratulations on your first novel! Sounds like 'my bag, baby', so I may have to buy a copy! I'm very interested in getting into writing myself, so I'm sending a PM.

To answer your question, I'm the sort who will get hooked by a good title coupled with a good cover - the two combined. that's for when I have no prior info or recommendations, of course. so, for a book like yours it may have passed me by. The next stage would be reading the synopsis and a page of the book, to check out the writing style. Seems maybe I should trust more in the old adage that you shouldn't judge a book by its cover!




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RE: Book covers - 24/8/2007 10:13:49 PM   
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 Congratulations, mate, and all the best with your career.

I'll be honest, I probably wouldn't go for this one on the strength of the cover or synopsis, really, which for me has the look of teen fantasy fiction of a type I wouldn't normally get heated about. But then that's just me; it's a horribly subjective business. What market specifically are you aiming for again? Knowing me, and my buying bias (simple covers, dark themes, black comedy: I know what I like when I see it)  I'd be prone to certain presuppositions touched on in:

'One might look at The Magic Lands and find the title a little generic, and the summary may be a little cliche, but if you were to pick it up you'll see that it is full of suprises. The story is quite a roller coaster and the plot can become utterly unpredictable. I should also mention, that this isn't little red riding hood. The story is dark, bringing up memories of another dark fantasy, Pan's Labrynth. Like Pan's Labrynth,and any good fable, there is an underlying message behind it all and it is a message definitely worth hearing'.
 
and there you go, I'd miss all those surprises. But listen, if you're anywhere near as inventive in your story-telling as Del Toro was with Pan's (which I loved to death btw: multi-layered fable at its finest) then result.

So congratulations again. Getting a book published these days is a task comparable with Sisyphus pushing a rock up Mount Olympus. Or so I hear.

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RE: Book covers - 16/9/2007 11:46:13 AM   
MagicMan

 

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Hi everyone,
I hope you will forgive me for getting all excited and letting you know about my first official review for The Magic Lands. You can find it here: http://www.enchantedentertainment.co.uk/book-news-reviews/review-of-the-magic-lands-by-mark-hockley/
Of course, I hope it will help to encourage you to rush out and get a copy of the book! :)

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RE: Book covers - 17/9/2007 1:21:42 PM   
Newander


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Well done mate, how exciting to have a book review. Good for you

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RE: Book covers - 26/3/2008 11:47:36 PM   
MagicMan

 

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For anyone interested there are a number of mini reviews of The Magic Lands on Amazon.co.uk It would be great to hear from some readers and I'm always happy to answers questions if anyone has one!

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RE: Book covers - 27/3/2008 5:16:30 PM   
KennyM


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congrat's on getting your book published you must feel like a proud father

what attracts me to a book firstly is probably title then cover, that is obviously if I haven't any knowledge of the author or previous works. A good cover can be immediately attention grabbing though but as they say "never judge a book...... ahh..I'm sure you know the rest

all the best for any future works

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RE: Book covers - 27/3/2008 9:42:31 PM   
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The most visually misleading cover you can get.

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RE: Book covers - 28/3/2008 1:45:49 AM   
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I take a very aesthetic view whenever I buy books from a bookshop. Although, only when I don't know what I want, which is most of the time. Whenever I buy online, I take it from reviews, recommendations and if I've read a good book, I'll browse the authors' other novels, or find other similar books. 

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RE: Book covers - 28/3/2008 3:28:42 PM   
MagicMan

 

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Thanks to everyone who taken the time to reply. I think there's been a lot of valid points raised and some helpful, useful suggestions.

If anyone gets a chance to check out a couple of short excerpts from The Magic Lands at this link: http://hometown.aol.co.uk/markjohnhockley/myhomepage/mywork.html I would be interested to hear what you think.

Thanks again.

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RE: Book covers - 7/6/2008 9:51:51 AM   
MagicMan

 

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As a small thank you for all of the support I've had here, I thought I would post an excerpt from a work in progress, which hopefully will end up being my next book. This is only a rough version, so jump all over me, but constructive criticism is always a good thing. It's called THE SHADOW OF THE ROSE and it's another fantasy novel in a similar vein to THE MAGIC LANDS. Of course for some this may be a punishment rather than a treat! :)

He had noticed that the temperature had been gradually dropping and it was becoming quite cold, which was quite ironic as most of the children referred to this place as the hothouse, so at least Mr. Pinchbeck had done his job successfully in that regard. Encouraged by this, he resolved to wait a little while longer, speculating that perhaps the task of convincing The Headmaster to come was taking slightly longer than had been anticipated.
From the far end of the greenhouse, there was a rustling sound and Martin ducked down instinctively, his eyes and ears immediately alert.
Now that he might very well be about to come face to face with The Headmaster, the prospect intimidated him to such a degree that he broke out in a cold sweat, but then the idea surfaced in his mind that there was always the possibility that it could be someone even more undesirable creeping about in the undergrowth, and this made him even more uneasy as he waited for whoever was lurking there to show themselves.
"Martin," whispered a voice suddenly from somewhere to his left and he strained his ears, trying to recognise who it could be. "Martin, are you here?  It's me, Jo!"
He stood up, scanning the vegetation and saw a figure making toward him. He realised then just how dim the light had become, the girl almost unrecognisable until she was within ten feet or so and the idea of turning on the lights briefly passed through his mind, but the surprise of seeing Jo soon made him forget about everything but why she was there.
"What are you doing here?" he said in a tone that said he was very relieved it was her.
"I didn't mean to sca...creep up on you," she said, not wanting to offend him by suggesting he was afraid. But the truth was she found it hard to believe that anyone would not be frightened waiting here alone, crowded in by masses of plant life, the place so dark she had almost tripped over making her way through the aisles to get to him. Stacks of empty crates littered the vast greenhouse and unused flowerpots were everywhere, the place surprisingly cluttered and untidy.
"It's all right," he replied with an awkward smile, "but why did you come, I mean, I'm glad you did, but what's happened? Has something gone wrong?"
Jo's grave look told him that something was indeed wrong and he moved closer to her, concerned at the distress he saw in her frightened eyes.
"There was nothing in The Headmaster's files, just blank pages," she blurted out quickly. "And Peter's hurt his leg, falling down the stairs when we were chased, or at least we think we were chased. Someone found us in the office anyway, The Headmaster I suppose and we ran, that's when Peter fell. Then we saw the note in Mr. Welles...I mean Mr. Pinchbeck's room and it said you were in danger, so I came to get you." She finished and looked at him with an odd expression that said ‘I hope that made sense’ and Martin nodded instinctively, understanding without having to be told. Jo gave him a grateful smile. "Anyway, I think we  had better get out of here," she added, Mr. Welles' warning foremost in her mind.
"All right," Martin agreed, "but hold on a minute, just let me get something." Saying this, he quickly walked a few feet to his left and plucked one of the yellow flowers he had been admiring earlier and then nervously turned back to face Jo. "I thought you might like this," he said very softly, barely able to maintain eye contact.
Jo blushed but smiled with quiet pleasure. "Thank you," she murmured, wishing she could think of more to say, but she suddenly found herself tongue-tied.
As the boy stepped forward to hand her the rose, there was a clattering noise from their right and Martin stopped in his tracks, eyeing Jo with alarm. Whoever it might be, he realised immediately that they mustn't discover her here with him, as that would certainly be seen as a serious violation of the all important rules of this wretched institution. "You have to hide," he hissed urgently and glancing about in desperation his eye fell upon a large crate.  "Quickly, get inside," he whispered to her, pointing at the wooden box and without really thinking Jo followed his instructions, clambering clumsily in and squatting down.
Grabbing hold of another crate, Martin stacked it on top leaving Jo in darkness with only the smallest of slits to let in what little light there was and she pushed her eye up against this gap so that she might be able to see what was going on outside.
As she watched from her uncomfortable, cramped position, a terrible scene began to play itself out before her, like some grotesque peepshow.
"So here you are, Martin, my little friend," said a voice, but Jo could only see the boy's reaction and not the speaker, but this was enough to tell her that whoever was there with him, Martin was very much afraid.  "Well, aren't you going to say hello?" another voice asked good humouredly, but Jo recognised the note of sarcasm in it and she squirmed to see who was out there. Two hulking figures ambled into view to stand before the boy and Jo had to bite her lip not to let out a cry.
"I think he's nervous," Joshua Snipe said with a slow shake of his head, the grin he wore making him look very much like a Halloween pumpkin.
"Maybe he's got reason to be," returned Joseph, rubbing his hands together unpleasantly.
Martin had remained silent until now, his mind racing, trying to come up with some plausible lie about why he was there that would enable him to escape unscathed, but before he could say anything Joseph pointed at him, a wide, malicious smile commandeering his features.
"What's the flower for, nature boy?" he chuckled, "is it a peace offering!?" The two men chortled with amused laughter for a few moments and Martin decided that the only thing he could do was stick to the story Mr. Pinchbeck had originally intended for The Headmaster.
"There's something wrong with the temperature in here," he mumbled, doing his level best to sound self-assured, "Mr. Pinchbeck told me to wait here while he went to get The Headmaster."
Joseph chuckled, the sound without humour and Martin felt a chill creep up his spine.   "The Headmaster!? Is that a fact?"
Martin knew he had to choose his words very carefully and hesitated before speaking again. "Everything in here will die if it isn't fixed," he said with as much confidence as he could muster.  "You must have noticed how cold it is?"
Joshua was nodding at him solemnly. "Not everything," he stated, his small eyes like black marbles, and when Martin gazed into them all he could see was an utter void, as if the man had no emotions whatsoever, just an unquenchable compulsion to inflict pain and sorrow.
Martin swallowed hard and shuffled his feet uneasily.  "What do you mean?"
Joseph just laughed at this, the sound echoing eerily through the greenhouse and Martin knew that his only chance of survival was to run. But before he could act upon this realisation, the Snipes moved closer to him, effectively fencing him in with no way out, as if sensing what he had in mind.
"Only you," Joshua told him with a wink, "you're the only one who's going to die."
Now Martin did try to run, regardless of the fact that he knew it was useless, his instinct for survival overriding all logical thought, but Joseph caught him roughly by his jumper and hauled him to the floor, Martin's head striking the hard ground with a horrible dull sound, the rose crushed and cast aside to lay beside his cheek.
"Chances are you're going to have a nasty headache," Joshua told him off-handedly.
"Right then, master Martin," Joseph began in a businesslike tone, "let's get down to brass tacks.  We need some information and you are going to give it to us.  I must warn you that we are already rather upset with you, as you have been uncommonly difficult to locate, and we do have a schedule to keep to. But now that we have you, we expect you to do the right thing and tell us what we need to know." He stared down at the boy who lay curled up at his feet, too afraid to move, Martin only distantly aware of the sensation of something thick and viscous trickling through his hair and onto his neck .
"So," continued Joshua, taking up where his brother had left off, "this is how it is. We need to know where those three newcomers are, I'm sure you know who I mean. A boy and two girls. If you help us, maybe we won't have to hurt you quite so much. If not, well, I know you understand quite well what will happen then."
Martin looked up into the faces of his persecutors, but found that instead of men, all he could see were alien creatures, their eyes wide with desire and he understood that everything was lost.
Although he tried very hard not to, he could not help but glance toward the wooden crate where Jo was hiding, wanting so much just to catch a glimpse of her one last time, but she was too well concealed and a part of him that was able to set aside the desperation and despair that gripped him with such hideous strength, took comfort from that.
"Well, boy," prompted Joseph, giving him a kick in the ribs that sent all thoughts of anything but pain fleeing from his mind. "Where are they?"
Gritting his teeth so hard that it would have hurt if it were not for the all-consuming pain in his side, Martin hissed at them. "I don't know.  I haven't seen them."
Joshua stepped forward and placed a heavy boot onto the boy's outstretched hand as he reached for the battered rose, hoping to take courage from this symbol of his affection for Jo, and Martin screamed from the agony that shot up his arm as his fingers were crushed with deliberate, slow care.
The man bent down until his face was very close to the boy's and gave a merciless grin.   "We know you were with those two girls. You were seen! So come on now, do yourself a favour and tell us where they are. What are they to you anyway?"
Martin's mind was beset by flashing lights, reds and yellows blinking in and out and he did his best to think of any way he might be able to escape, but however hard he tried, his brain steadfastly refused to function properly, as if it too were injured, his hand now almost numb.
"You don't have many more chances," Joseph told him with an air of impatience.
"Just tell us where they're hiding and you can go," Joshua added, affecting a congenial tone of voice. "After all, it's not you that we want, it's them. It really doesn't have to be like this, you know."
Martin closed his eyes, the anguish that he felt almost unbearable and for a moment, fleeting but nonetheless real, he asked himself why he should stay silent, but then somehow finding its way even through the weight of fear and pain, Jo's face appeared in his mind and he saw her smiling at him as he offered her the rose.
Oh Jo, why did this have to happen?  Why?
"Go to hell," he whispered, tasting his own tears upon his lips.
With brutal force, Joseph brought his boot down onto Martin's arm, snapping it like a twig, the shriek it provoked reverberating from the canopy of glass above them. "You had your chance," the man grunted and knelt down, putting his full weight onto the boy's chest, several ribs collapsing almost immediately, one puncturing a lung.
Sobbing and struggling for breath, Martin attempted to wriggle free but it was useless, the man's bulk crushing him like an over-ripe piece of fruit, and as consciousness began to drift away from him, all he could think of was how this must appear to Jo, who he knew was so close and yet seemed so distant from him, as if she were no more than a dream he had once believed was real.

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RE: Book covers - 7/6/2008 10:45:46 AM   
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That excerpt was great; really want to know what subsequently happens to Martin and Jo.  Will definitely take a look at your first book now.

Congratulations on your first publication; I know someone who I have encouraged as I believe he is a really good writer and know how excited he would be to see one of his works in print; it must be a thrilling time for you and your family and friends.  The extremely positive reviews on Amazon must be very gratifying for all the work you have put in.  Best wishes for a long and successful career.  Have you been able to "give up your day job" on the strength of the publication of your first novel?  

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RE: Writer looking for some feedback - 8/6/2008 7:27:48 PM   
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Congrats on the publication, I have to say I myself always trust my closest friends for recommendations and i'll often know a few pages in whether I'm hooked or no, there's nothing worse than feeling like you have to persevere! What's the blurb on the back say?

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