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crevil -> Basic writing tips (22/4/2012 4:13:51 PM)
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I like how you warn us about how even knowing who Pierce will play will be a spoiler, and then YOU DON'T EVEN SAY WHO HE IS GOING TO PLAY. I presume by the format of the text and the fact that it's almost the only character name there, that it's geneticist Aldrich Killian. But just to make this clearer to some of the foreign readers, you should write it down more plainly. The subheader says "He'll play a key role..." and you have to read the article twice just to see if you missed something, because none of the lines read anywhere close to "Pierce will play [charactername]". Remember your audience, we don't necessarily know all the stuff related to the article you know or you think we know.
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